الجمعة، 22 أكتوبر 2010


First Draft''women's work''

   Nowadays, women's work is a double-faced coin. I think it's very important if she could arrange her life between her outside work and work at home.
  
   Some people agree with women's work, because they see that she could help her husband by getting money. The money will raise their living-standard.
   Some women think that when they work, they will be independent. It means that they don't want anyone to give them money or take care of them. They think they could apply all the requirements of life and live a better live, just when they themselves go to work.

   There is another opinion of people who are against women's work. They say that when she works, she will go home tired. She won't have spare time to do her home duties, like bringing up her children, cooking and cleaning. She also doesn't have time to take care of her husband and children.
   Some women when they go to work, they become nervous and angry all the time. Others have some diseases like pressure. All these things don't give her some kind of stability in her and her family's life.

   Finally, sometimes I'm with women's work but most of time I'm against it. I feel that women should relax themselves from working outside home and to leave this hard work to men. It's their duty to work and they should know that it's their responsibility to get money.



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  1. 1. I think it's (dont use abbreviations in academic writing).
    2. and live a better live (life)
    3. and they should know that it's their responsibility to get money.(you mean it is not their responsibility to bring money?)

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  2. Your draft is very good but try to make the corrections I sent you.
    I want you to read four of your friends drafts and send comments and suggestions to them, then send their names to me to see your comments.

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  3. welldone eman. your essay is wonderful. your essay is well organized. the introduction is so attractive and i like it so much. the purpose and the main idea of the essay are clear. you present your opinion in a good way in addition to the counter opinion. the conclusion is very good. finally good job eman.
    wish you all the best in your life.

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  4. good draft eman. i like it as it is short and you present your idea in a simple way

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  5. Dear Emay,
    God bless your hand, intersting topic with strong introduction , you have almost covered all the details of the issue . The ideas are clear and well organized.The conclusion sums up your essay ,keep up and best wishes

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  6. your topic is very interesting and strong . l liked in your introduction using _double faced coin_ it is a very good start . your aim is ckear from the start

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  7. good essay your ideas are clear and your introduction very exciting

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