Air pollution
Pollution is becoming a serious problem all over the world especially in Egypt. Pollution affects on air, water, soil and many other things.
Air pollution is the chemicals, particulates or biological materials that are introduced by humans and their products into the atmosphere.
Air pollution is caused by smoke of industries, open-air waste burning, burning fuel of the transportation and smoking which all go directly to the air.
Transportation is the main reason for air pollution because in Egypt there are many kinds of vehicles which burn fuel and produce a lot amount of smoke in the air. Some industrial factories also were built in the cities which produce smoke. There is another reason which is open-air waste burning such as burning rice straw or burning rubbish. At last smoking itself and different types of chemicals and dust are also reasons for air pollution.
The most dangerous result to air pollution is The Global Warming or what is also called Green House effect which means that the temperature of the two poles becomes higher which leads to ice melting and it is a disaster!!
Air pollution not only causes acid rains and smog, but it also harms humans; it causes many diseases like cancer, respiratory and reproductive effects. Air pollution also leads to Ozone Depletion.
There are many solutions to stop air pollution such as, elimination of fossil fuels,also try to reduce emissions of industrial gases from factories. The Minister of Environment should find ways to reduce and recycle one's own products.
Finally, all of us should cooperate to stop the air pollution from increasing and hurting our health in Egypt.
Thanks Eman for writing the second draft and sending it. But I want you to use your own words because many words in your essay are difficult to be understood. Also, I dont wont you to copy whole paragraphs from the internet. You can read about the topic in the internet, then use your own information, content and write your essay
ردحذفPollution is becoming a serious problem all over the world especially in Egypt. Pollution affects on (omit "on" )air, water, soil and many other things.
ردحذفAir pollution is the chemicals, particulates or biological materials that are introduced by humans and their products into the atmosphere.
Air pollution is caused by smoke of industries, open-air waste burning, burning fuel of the transportation and smoking which all go directly to the air.
In my opinion (add this starter), Transportation is the main reason for air pollution because in Egypt there are many kinds of vehicles which burn fuel and produce a lot (huge) amount of smoke in the air. Some industrial factories also (that) were built in the cities (which, omit) produce smoke. There is another reason which is open-air waste burning such as burning rice straw or burning rubbish. At last smoking itself and different types of chemicals and dust are also reasons for air pollution.
The most dangerous result to air pollution is The Global Warming or what is also called Green House effect which means that the temperature of the two poles becomes higher which leads to ice melting and it is a disaster (this sentence is long, try to make it shorter or divide it to two or more sentences.)!!
Air pollution not only causes acid rains and smog, but it also harms humans; it causes many diseases like cancer, respiratory and reproductive effects. Air pollution also leads to Ozone Depletion.
There are many solutions to stop air pollution such as, elimination of fossil fuels,also try (trying) to reduce emissions of industrial gases from factories. The Minister of Environment should find ways to reduce and recycle one's own products.
Finally, all of us should cooperate to stop the air pollution from increasing and hurting our health in Egypt.
Nice draft ya emy.
ردحذفBut i think you should make it longer, and cooperate between paragraphs.
I think it's your own word, and it's expressive
thanks Dr Samah and I'll correct these mistakes
ردحذفthanks ya sasoo I'll try to make it longer
ردحذفHi emy. ur draft is good as it is simple.but i think u should take care of organizing ur paragraphs because most of them contain only one sentence and that doesn't make acomplete paragraph or illustrate ur idea .good luck
ردحذفGood job Emy , your essay has a clear introduction , body and a definite conclusion. It has a specific purpose and precise words .But i think you need to use more details and make it longer. well done Emy ..good luck
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